autobiography

  

Assignment
The focus of this assignment is your development as a writer—in both your native and second or foreign language(s). Consider your entire life, including pre-school years, and do not limit yourself to school experiences. Some areas of your experience you might want to consider include: people who have influenced your writing, your memories of successes and failures in writing, your feelings about writing (whether it is easy or difficult for you and why), and your strengths and weaknesses in writing. You do not need to write about all of or only these areas nor follow this order in your paper. The purpose of thinking about these topics is to help you recover and arrange relevant memories. Please note that although the assignment asks you to focus on your writing history, you might have to include certain experiences that do not explicitly relate to writing but provide a context for those experiences.
Memoirs are usually not argumentative and do not require a thesis/argument or research (although you may structure your autobiography around an argument if you wish). Memoirs are often structured around an encounter with an obstacle or complication and the lessons learned from that confrontation/encounter. Including details is vital. 
I need you to fix this essay according to the comments but still use the personal information in the attachment. And I was host in a american family and it changes me a lot, you can try to add this part in the essay, and do whatever you can to make is 900 words
The comments from the instructor is :” To that end, you will need to heavily revise this first draft. I need to hear more about the process of learning how to       write in both languages. Consider any  struggles and successes you experienced   in each of these languages. Are they the same struggles/successes or different? Do you approach writing in one language differently than the other, or do you take the same approach? What have you learned about writing in each of these languages? And, most importantly, what exactly does writing mean to you now? “